All Comments on 'My Camping Trip Ch. 02'

Didn't much care for the story- the POV kept shifting so that I couldn't tell who the narrator was. But I DO congratulate you on your upcoming nuptials... :)

I couldn't finish reading it because it was just too incoherent. Also had some mistakes and felt rushed; left out key details. It would probally be better with some more work though, as it explores the best friend/couple conversion theme with a violent twist.