All Comments on 'My First Time'

A lot of people cheat once in their all life and no more. Like a lot of people used once something weed but they do not become drug addict same to alcohol/gambling/adrenalin addicts..

Somebody finds the excitement to be stronger than the guilt she/he become serial cheater....................as drug/alcohol/gambling/adrenalin addict. In that case perhaps a quick divorce the last help to avoid to work cheating addict for the next 5-10-25 years.

Just one question. How was the divorce ....?

Good story but your spelling was pretty bad, I had to translate to what you should have written- but none the less you made me very hard, thanks

She was married less than a year and she is bragging about cheating...But the end made me laugh for a long time: "Needless to say our meeting that day were full of smiles. The conversation with my husband that evening was full of guilt..."!!!! As someone said, all we have to do is wait for the divorce!!!! 1*

They say next time will be easier with less guilt! Happend Marriage!

Some people write stories as morality tales, or they're trying to work out personal emotional issues.

This contribution comes across as a fantasy, pure and simple. I can take it at face value. Read any survey on male and female sex fantasies. Some of them can be pretty bizarre, nothing that the fantasizer would seriously want to act out.

Agree with another comment .. clean up the spelling next time. It's always a jolt that pulls me out of the story when I have to stop and mentally correct a spelling error.

Sounds true to me and not a story by a professional writer and story teller.

Putting porn on thd tube was a stroke of genius.

All actions start as thought, they usually progress to words and then the act itself. So, fantasize about cheating, you are 1/3 of the way to cheating. Talk about it to your friends and you have made it 2/3 of the way to cheating. Most of the time, this is as far as it goes, but the gun has been loaded and the safety is off, and that is a risky way to live your life. Self control, a dirty word since the 1960's is the wise move here. Thinking about who you want to be, how you want to live your life, and sticking to it will get you where you want to go. In this case, her marriage is finished. If her husband accepts what she has done, he has no self respect, and he did not care much about the marriage or her. She is a useless life partner, untrustworthy and unloving. The reason stories like this get such low ratings is because they are not erotic or loving. They are about stupid people doing stupid things and thinking they can get away with it. Even the sicker ones, where the husband accepts the perverted wife's behavior are totally unrealistic and do not take into account the others involved, family, friends, acquaintances. Most people would shun perverts like this. They are destructive and dangerous.

However, you should use an editor. There are many grammatical errors and some typos. For instance, there not their and then there was here instead of hear. Other than that I liked the story.

It took a very short time for her to discover she's just a slut at heart. Why would she get married and put her husband through the divorce that's coming? Even for fiction, this suck and fuck made no sense. 1 star.

She gets drunk and takes on two guys as a newly married wife. The story is too short, and the consequences of her actions should come into play here, a divorce or other retribution. What kind of life will she lead from here on out. We need answers.

These type authors forgot to write about the future of the married couples.

This wife that had a little gang bang, and enjoyed it to the hilt. How will she react if she suspects hubby of skirt chasing. The sad thing is that now she will think that he is doing it all the time; if she is than he must be!

Of course since he must be then she can do it more often.

Very well done. Enjoyed it throughly.

From a critical podium; there were a few typos, but that ain't a thing. Do wish it was a bit longer simply because it was a damned good read.

Five Stars.

I loved the story although it was way to short. I would love to read more of a descripti0n of how she felt as she was pleasuring her co-worker and customer I want to read more about what she tells her husband. Does she tell him what she did or keep it her secret? Does her new found sexual experience help her career?

She should have went home bred with a baby growing inside her

smiling here... sounds like some one i know personally 5 stars

You need one. That was a chore to tread because it was fuk off typos and bad grammar.

This is the kind of tale which I would classify as Erotic Coupling (alternatively - Group Sex.) Hubby is not a factor in the story ... It would read just as well if they were separated (or divorcing). Even if all references to Hubby disappear altogether, it would just lose a few 'impropriety points.'

LW, IMHO, has to involve Hubby as an important component of the story. Not necessarily as a high-presence aspect, but an important component nonetheless. Hubby may be positive or negative, or simply conflicted. Similarly, Sweetie may denigrate him, praise him or ignore him, but LW depends on the interplay of Sweetie, her activities, and Hubby!

This story needs a good proof-reader, and could also use a good editor, but it IS competent erotica.

unrated in this category

at least she waited a year after getting marriage and her sex life with her husband was great so i can see why see cheated. Under such pressure i believe what i read was a person everyone would want for a friend or spouse or not someone comment it was erotic how simple are they.

The story wasn't bad, just a little too short for me. And I don't care what kind of story you're writing: typos/bad grammer take strength away from it. Keep trying. I think you have potential.

I'm new to this and I am looking for an editor. I have much I want to share and will work to improve my submissions.

Thanks,

Alicia

Betrayal really pushes my buttons so I become hyper critical. I would say the the protagonist needs to be fleshed out more. I don't read the sex so I can't help there but more of the emotion and rationalization for the behavior would be help. flesh out the inner conflict as it happens.

Thanks for the effort

The continuous flirting with the coworker you travel with is bad news and will almost always lead to something you shouldn't do as a married person. Now she's gonna be known as the married pig who will let two guys double team her. Her poor husband but in the real world this goes on more often than not with people who travel a lot for work. You wind up spending a lot of time flying , dinners, drinking etc. the closer you get the more risky the conversations become and than you start to rationalize that you away from home no one will find out and before you know it your betraying your spouse. It's a shame so many cheat and are not loyal. Just wait to get married if your not done fucking a variety of people , get it out of your system and when your ready to be a faithful loyal partner than you marry

Predictable almost to boring. So what, 24 year old married woman picks up men in a bar and fucks them. No real reason and no consequences.

I can never understand the vitriol from 'anonymous' comments. If they don't like this type of story, go elsewhere but don't read a story as reality and post your comments that way.

You need an editor as your spelling and grammar is pretty poor tbh and the story can be made more enticing with a bit more 'painting the picture'.

I have never tried editing but I am happy to help out and see what you think. You can look at my story (somewhere on here) and let me know what you think.

Whatever you do, don't let 'anonymous' comments undermine you. They don't understand 'stories' and obviously everything in their world is reality. ;)

No story, no plot, no character development, no crisis or solution, no anything. Almost anyone can write a description of three people fucking! Develop some story-telling skills.

Can't help but think that the author of this piece is Francaise? Tell me if I'm wrong.

This story is fun, but is most certainly 'translated'.

Interessé.

"had to travel their often for business" "he was their too late" Try using there.

I thought it was pretty hot. Sure, she could flesh out the story a bit but still hot.

It's a pretty stupid story. Don't people realize that cheating after a year or two of marriage isn't a very interesting story line? It really does come off kind of stupid, both as a story but also in the credibility department.

The marital relationship that is developed through many years, not to even mention the deepening through child rearing, is what drives the shock, anticipation and the overall intensity level in a story. A horny superficial cheater bitch gets some dick? It doesn't even ping the meter.

If the author can develop some virtue and therefore some conflict in the mind of the cheater there will be a sense of tension through the cheating event. It's just basic plot stuff.

But also, why the constant moronic typos? At a certain point you start wondering about the sincerity of the writer.

They spent all evening filling her with booze then watching a porn movie on the bed and once the blonde guy showed his big cock she gave way to temptation and there is husband who has been cuckolded and don't know it yet. This was her first time but it certainly wont be the last she will hook up each business meeting she attends.

With my husband really ended up not mattering one iota... since it proved to be our last as husband and wife.... I never figured out he was pissed at me... what did I do wrong? Both of the guys I screwed around with sait they really enjoyed fucking me and my oral efforts... so my husband should have been pleases I was so good at cheating. I would have even fucked him once in a while, if he would not have kicked me out and made me lose my job and reputation. Thankfully we had no children to realize what a mean man their father would have been.. such a selfish man, wanting me to only have sex with him.

So many people say they like this story. So many people say that they wish this was their wife. So many damn liars.

Is there a part 2 where now that she knows she can get away with it she continues or maybe the opposite where one of the guys brags and it gets back to husband?

I searched through my favorites until I found this story again. I still love it. It seems so realistic as if it could really be true. Still my favorite!

Seems somewhat realistic. While reading it, I was there with you, on the bed with the two men. You missed doing it in college, but luckily, you got to appreciate the experience in Atlanta. Too bad you were already married. Had you not already been married, it would have been total fun! 5* ~~JB

childish

Another pathetic dude writing a completely by the numbers laughfest of stupidity.

It seemed so realistic I had to nail my eyes down to stop them from rolling. So fucking hot!!

ROFLMFAO

Really after a year or so of marriage? Whatever. Why did she get married? She is a horrible person. She will continue anr get caught. Hopefully before they have kids, so husband can divorce and start again. Heo is this tripe rated so high. It isn't even well written from an erotica standpoint.