All Comments on 'My Husband Watched Magic Mike'

The last 30 or so lines look like an inadvertent 'paste' from the earlier tale. Change of voice and a small temporal disconnect ... in other words, Sweetie is no longer talking, Hubby is, and he's repeating the ending of the parallel story!

The author tactic of offering a second voice (narrator) is (IMHO) effective ONLY when one or more IMPORTANT contributions (usually which change the readers' understanding of the plot flow) are made which weren't, usually couldn't be, known from the other (original) voice. In this case, the story from Sweerie's perpective was essentially an exact telling of exactly the SAME story. Easy to do, adds zilch for the readers' benefit!

3*

Not a bad little fantasy.