by MelancholyBaby
Not my usual style, but I had to read it since Mel is the one who wrote it. Even though it's not what I usually read, it captivated me and drew me in. I look forward to reading future submissions.
Good style. Not without description but not over descriptive.
I like it.
I've been reading Melancholy Baby's writing on the boards for a long time. This story shows the typical care and attention to detail that she puts into her writing. Not to mention the sensitivity and heart.
She only gets better.
A great buildup to a climatic finish. I hope you write more. Probably one of the best first submissions I've seen.Well done.
I really enjoyed your story. Well written. It kept my attention the entire time. I loved the characters. I hope you continue to write!!
Constantly arousing and erotic, much better than the usual. This is remarkably good for a first submission, and I'm looking forward to more by this author; she has a writing talent that seems well-matched to her knowledge of the erotic. A nice flavor of the Dom/submissive in this, but not overblown, and quite touching, really. This seems to be the first in a series for the characters, since there was a little note of expectation left at the end. I hope the next installment is forthcoming.