by incestisbest1984
As a romantic, who especially enjoys mutually consensual incest, I find no emotional connection between Beth and Chris. The sexual act performed in this story seemed like nothing more than a pity lay. Beth is performing the act simply to keep her wife happy.
Wrong category. Getting head from his mother's wife is not incest. Might fit better in erotic coupling, just about.
Great idea and initial story and I know it will get better the more you submit.
Virgin at 18, lesbian parents, 44FF tits, for fuck's sake how about a believable story now & again.
You started off with an interesting beginning.
Moved into a confusing Mom, Mommy,
Mother, Mom's Mess. Skipped any real
character depth.
And ended with a 30 second pity blow job....
It's an ok first attempt. But don't rush things
re-read through your future story's then set
them aside a few days come back to them
and do some fine tuning before submitting them.
Hey dickhead anonymous, you know what erotic fantasy is right? Eat shit! For the writer, not bad
I really like the story idea, but the mom & mom thing was confusing. I'd say the same thing if both women were named Mary. love to see it refined and longer. Keep going.
Great theme or idea. Could have been much longer but oh well. Thanks for sharing.
Not bad would have liked a little more development ,as for the comment above ...forget them... Now keep writing!