All Comments on 'My Neighbour's Party Pt. 01'

I loved it, and I cant wait to read the next one. a reccomendation for you though is to differentiate the changing of scenes and points of view, it was a bit confusing and can really take the reader out of the story. Some writers will put the names of whoever point of view it's from above the new sections, some will separate different pov's with clear Mark's of separation such as a page break of ellipsis. Labeling time jumps can be a good idea as well though not strictly necessary, but any confusion you can preemptively stop will make readers drawn deeper into the story. Find what works for you and make this story shine even more, I'm already eager and waiting for the next part!

Love the story so far. A helpful suggestion if I may?

I noticed a few grammatical errors such as misspelled words or spots where connector words were left out entirely. Also, your overuse of the word "horny" seemed to stall the story in spots. Maybe substitute different words here and there to alleviate some of the tedium of using the same word constantly.

Otherwise, a good story and I look forward to more of Annie and Chris.

Great start to what will hopefully be a fantastic multi part story. What an amazing neighbour she would make. I would be in heaven living next to her. The party should be a lot of fun. Please carry on.

This was a nice,enjoyable story to read🌹Kant👠👠👠

I sort of got lost in the 1st part but did manage to figure it out, I would help if you added a bit more information. I am not into drugs of any kind but I love to dress up as a classic lady going to work. I would love to have a man take me out and treat me with gentel love. Not into pain of any kind eaither. My current wife supports my dressing but does not know I would love to have a man here to provide him oral pleasure or have him fuck my cute little butt. Just can not find a man in my area that would like to be pleasured orally or any other way darn it. da.cd@frontier.com

I might have stayed away from men. I need someone who loves and demands her lover to worship her body. Most women just tolerate vanilla sex. Men love having another man worship their cocks and so here I am. 4yourpleasureiam PM me for your personal slave.

Chapters one and two were quite erotic and engaging. I could not stop reading and really, really would like some more chapters. Satin sissy

Cannot find part 2. !!!!????? Help

Good story doesn't even begin to say what this story conveys. I would love to read the follow up chapter. While reading I was waiting for someone to jump out of a closet, or she would turn off a camera, or something that would show, she was a typical woman, but it didn't happen. That's jut my suspicious nature, and I'm still not convinced of her sincerity. She only did this because of her brother, or so it seems.

I really hope you continue this story and i will be following it as far as you take it, thank you.........i wish I'd met an Annie but reading about it will have to do lol