by Elissia_Nyobe
Interesting, but the movement is almost excruciatingly slow. Speed things up.
Sounds like it could be an interesting story. Waiting for next chapter. Thanks
And it's the long pauses between dialogs. sometimes I completely loose thread as to who said what to whom and why. Work on that and it should be a really good one. The build-up is fine with me was this isn't the usual sex fling but a rather long term real life occurrence.