by Elissia_Nyobe
And it's the long pauses between dialogs. sometimes I completely loose thread as to who said what to whom and why. Work on that and it should be a really good one. The build-up is fine with me was this isn't the usual sex fling but a rather long term real life occurrence.
Sounds like it could be an interesting story. Waiting for next chapter. Thanks
Interesting, but the movement is almost excruciatingly slow. Speed things up.