by the mixer
It comes across a little too quickly. Keep working at it.
Hello, Thought the story was great, I really am looking forward to stage two. Please do not leave it to long.
Gary
Keep going. Very exciting stuff.
Was great. love the potential for more - as gary said, don't leave it too long!!!
shiela
Woman is singular, women is plural. True story? Works more for comedians than writers of erotica! Lastly, stories of control-play is much more exciting when the man is not married. Otherwise it's just creepy.