All Comments on 'My Senior Year Experience Ch. 01'

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blackwatereagleblackwatereagleover 8 years ago
2 talons up!

From the Eagle!!

Keeep it Cumming!

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Decent start

not too bad for a first entry. Not sure if you have an editor but that might help you. Hoping the next chapter is a bit longer

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
You'll need

to explain how this girl who never saw a dick before is not a virgin and so hard up that she has at least two or three squirting orgasms. Not completely unrealistic, but, not especially easy to believe. Okay, she came from the sex, but squirting is a rare thing and multiples are also less than common for teen girls. At least you kept their proportions in the realm of possible.

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