by HornyHenry987
a good story could have been longer with more details added in... maybe some input as to their mental reactions to post sex and possible extension of them probably making this kind of a regular thing when home alone.
Awesome, but you could have dragged it out some more. Slow things down and use a lot more details. Describing the events in more detail makes it so much better! You did good here though, great job!
Damn I got hard. Hope you will write another story.
Short sweet and to the point. They are going to love hating each other for years to cumm.
Not bad, just need to slow things a little, proof read n you'll be there.
As for the "garbage" remark, tell him fuck off as dont see them putting a name to their comment and probably came within a few seconds anyway, childish reader pees me off.
Have another try but do your homework a bit more, read a few more yourself to grab a better idea of what folk like, then spell check n proof read it, oh n dont forget if you dont like it n it dont do nothing for you, then try again.
Best a luck
Dont pay no attention to the other mother fucker commenters. No , I should say dont pay attention to the other, want to be mother fuckers that are jealous that you are a mother fucker. The spelling bastard commenters. Hell, you are a beginner, you can learn to spell later. The spelling bastards would rather have a sorry story with good spelling. I didnt have trouble reading it. This is a very funny 5 star story.
Thanks all for reading! This was my first story here, so I'm sorry it was rushed. I've submitted edits which should be posted shortly! Stay turned for most stories!!
Garbage.. I'm not giving more than one star to an author who cannot be bothered to spell check or make use of volunteer proofreaders.
You are skipping some words when you wrote this but still good , continue please