All Comments on 'My Sister's Best Friends Ch. 04'

first three chapters were great.

but you failed miserably on this one.

got nothing against bdsm but bdsm by another person?

then blackmail?

damn.

you ruined the story.

I'll be honest, I love your story and your writing. The blackmail part, eeeeehh, not so much, especially in the way it was presented since I could identify myself with Ben a bit too much. However, I liked the turnaround, with a Ben knowing some Blackhat stuff.

I'll keep on reading, rooting for Ben to outsmart Eve :p

Fuck all these whiny little cunts this shit is the bee's knees! It's fucking interesting and I am interested in the story as much as I am the smut!Keep it up cortex I'll keep reading if you keep writing!

I'm also not sure how I feel about the blackmail thing, but it has made me curious about what else is in store. I like seeing him grow a little more of a backbone through it, though. If that's what the blackmail is intended for, to grow the character and progress his arc, then great. Just...do the character justice. I'm enjoying the series, though!

It was a good series till you brought Eve into it. Screwed the whole thing. It was going great till then. Now I will be telling everyone to avoid your story/stories from now on. Such great potential only to be ruined. sigh.

chapter 5???

This is probably the fourth time I've come across this story in the past 2 years. Would love to read chapter 5 when you upload it

Chapter 5?

you need to keep this going

Hopefully is coming to this soon

Terrorism, illegal drugs, blackmail. This isn't the least bit erotic - its simply sick.

I've just read all 4 chapters in one sitting and I was impressed with your description and storytelling and then it kind of got weird at the end of chapter 3 with the implied blackmail. But I thought, "ah, maybe it'll make for a good story," and I read chapter 4 and it was just the events immediately after with the blackmail hanging over them at the end. And then nothing. This was submitted in 2013 and there was so much scope for this story to evolve but nothing happened, it just stopped. It's just a bit disappointing.

Then it just fell apart.

Shame really.......

Niiice. Next?

It was going fine until you introduced Eve then it all rapidly went downhill.

I'm done with it now, so just why did you have to spoil a great story ?

Rapier

It was really good until the Eve part. I lost interest after that

Started off great, got a bit weird with the drugs, then went completely down the drain when Eve showed up. I would have finished the chapter if there had been anything redeeming after the end of Ch 3, but, unfortunately, there was not.

I'm not a fan of the use of drugs, I don't mind weed but holy shit this is extreme.. what's worse is when you write about something you clearly don't know about. Black sticky stuff isn't what hash is.. that's black tar heroin/opium. Hash is the trichomes off of weed pressed into a slab or turned into what they call honey oil which is the color of honey. "Black hash" is dark brown and not that sticky and is made from the resin of weed plants.

Before you talk about something, do a little bit of research.

Was good for the first 3 chapters,. Once the blackmail hit the entire story went to shit and turned me off.

The mix of drugs is a little too much. At the rate you are writing them, the kids would have died from overdoses and not enjoyed the feelings of sex. Some rolls and pot, sure. But this went WAAAAAAYYYYY to far.

Yeah, the blackmail should move the story to non consent category. The slipping in of drugs is a no no.the story as a whole was pretty awesome. But I keep thinking of the blackmail and that just kills it for me.

I'm one of those honest guys and deception by any means is something I abhore.

It think it was good idea to stop writing after the black mail, better he should have stopped after the 2th story, when it was still very good....

I didn’t mind the drugs or the blackmail so much, but having your MC doing all that tech while as high as a kite seemed kind of impossible…I think he’d’ve had trouble finding the front of his phone, never mind installing all that spying stuff on his sister’s kit.

This whole story is dishonest and in the grand scheme of things worthless. If it was real what would they remember long term as a valued relationship with each other since it would all be lacking integrity as a whole as it was all manipulated by drugs with no sincerity.