All Comments on 'Naked Vows Ch. 04'

Laura and Sarah are such relatable characters because each of them have fears, insecurities, painful experiences and desires; which are familar to all of us. The sex is scorching hot; and the suspense leaves me jonesing for the next chapter. The only downfall is having to wait for the next fix!

I'm enjoying the story, plot, characters, but you have some really basic spelling or grammar errors, which should have been corrected by the second chapter. It should be bored (verb for tedious), not board (noun for a piece of wood). You talk about cloths (material), instead of clothes (garments). It takes away from what could be a five star submission. You're up to Chapter 9 in submissions, and I hope you've sought help of editor or proof reader, because this could be a wonderful story if I weren't getting jarred by the errors which are like slaps in the face when I read one. It's good enough, I want to continue reading, just wish it were better.