All Comments on 'Nate's Evil Exploits Pt. 03'

Hmm came across as too clichéd, still well written but boring, albeit mildly arousing not a hint of what's to come!

I had no idea either. I was aiming for fluffy, episodic filth that would do the job, so to speak. Massive failure on that front. N'mind. I think I'll go back and rewrite these early ones to fit the final narrative style, then bind it all together into a novel. But yeah, you're right, these early ones are trite and untidy. I tried! :-)