All Comments on 'Neighbour, MIL and then My Wife Pt. 01'

Indian story about Indian culture...Should have been written in native Indian language...Would be better for all...2*

Would it kill the moderators here at Literotica to create a new "Foreign Language" category to catch all of these stories written by people whose command of the English language is sadly lacking? Let them spin their creative wheels somewhere where I don't have to trip over them?

I thought this was funny and interesting . Gave you 3*s, thendral. Reading it closely gives me a little insight into a different culture.

Some of the writing is very strange, interesting, funny?! For example..."the lizard in the room." and "Smell out the situation..." are these due to english difficulty or their way of expression?

This wasn't as bad as Duna and others.

Thanks for the effort.

AMerryman

@Ameryman If I got a good editor my stories are more readable. Sometime I got an editor for a published story and I REPUBLISH them in that storycollections where I publish my stories. In that story collection my mended version stories are changed in 2-12 hours.

I have 3 well edited stories of the 11 stories. They got the highest vote from the readers and I have more stories which are without editors.

The language differences enhahce the authenticity. Ignore the liberal perfectionists. Tell them "°GFY".

Hurry with next story.

Another idiot Indian. Not being racial here. All the stories about Indian people lately have portrayed them as sluts, whores and absolute fools. This was just more of the same. Despite the language issue this was just an awful attempt at story telling.

Not sure where you come from but I come from the land that invented 'English' and followed the story quite easily. Yes there were a few glitches here and there but nothing to stop the flow of the story. It was quite a good story and I am eagerly looking forward to the next Part. If you don't like what you are reading then just STOP READING and move on elsewhere. I don't know what Thendral's native language is but I wouldn't be able to read it if thats what (s)he wrote in so please BACK OFF with the moaning and groaning - Scot from England

Unfortunately, that doesn't mean your story is good. I just don't understand whatever culture this comes from.

"Her dick in his mouth" This story really needs some work.

Very good story it was easy to follow and moved at a decent pace. Keep up the good work I'm sure that your use of your second language will improve as you use it.

Indians are as bad as the others in writing execrable English including those whose "mother tongue" is English. Many of them need editors especially as they tend to translate from their language to English. Great writers like R K Narayan can do it well and get away with it. Not so the run of the mill writer. A glaring example of bad writing is the reference to "sacred thread" in the beginning. Shows a clear ignorance of the distinction between thepoonool/janua worn by the twiceborn and the thali or mangal sutra

Advice: Get a good editor. As For the unfriendly "commenters" they may do well to look at the list of literary prize winners esp Booker, to find enlightenment!

nice...தமிழில் இருந்தா இன்னும் அருமையாக இருந்திருக்கும்...

Sorry Your English is quite inadequate

தமிழில் மாத்திரம் இருந்தால் அருமையாக இருந்திருக்கும்.

I agree with the previous two commenters.