All Comments on 'New Boundaries'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Inconsistent gender nouns

You frequently changed he and she around and made it harder to tell who was doing what.

FrankHarris1FrankHarris1over 9 years agoAuthor
There was a reason

The shifting between use of gender pronouns was intended to convey Dana's developing sense of feminine submission in the course of his experience. Probably wasn't super clear, but I thought because there were only two protagonists, both male, it would be comprehensible.

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