All Comments on 'Newlyweds'

Sorry, but I find it a story killer where the author tries to get the reader to believe that he or she is in his body and looking out at others. It just does not work.

Remember you are telling a story.

I predict a long, happy, sex filled marriage for this couple. None of that monogamous jealousy garbage.

Make it several stories that are more reader-friendly in their lengths. Overall,nice writing.

Long, fun, sensual, arrousing, stimulating of mind and body. The best kind of story. Look forward to reading more.