by marx810
They aren't even related!? WTF it was so good, really good until that moment when I wasn't reading the type of book I wanted to be and I had essentially been tricked into it. Not Cool.
I love your dialogues! They are so vivid and real. You remind me of R.A.Heinlein (who was old perv himself lol) with that.
If he wanted to dissuade her, he should have pointed out that she raped him. Sure, the 1st time was an accident, she didn't know. The 2nd time was pre-meditated rape. I think that if it was pointed out to her that fucking him in his sleep, without his consent, was no better than if some guy did that to her if she passed out at a party, it would give her pause.
This isn't a criticism of the story, just a 'what they could have said' with 20/20. Story's hot, 4 out 5 pervs like me agree, and the other just hasn't read it yet.
Thank you! All good. Wouldn’t change a thing, and you’re permafavourited. Follow your instincts
The story was great, right up until you brought in the "not real dad" thing. ruined the whole taboo feel of the story. sorry. But it is very well written and you're a great story teller. I'd love to see more of your work! Keep writing!
It was great until the "not real dad" started lost the whole taboo nature of the story too bad