All Comments on 'Night Eternal Ch. 02'

keep writing

spot on

This was a good chapter with a very sexy and hot sex scene. I do find there is a lot of narration and not a lot of action.

Good stuff. Needs more ... simmer, though. More time to build tension (sexual and otherwise) for a more satisfying release. Looking forward to the rest of the chapters.

just red ur story (june 4)My humble advice is you must get yourself a publisher. tell me when you add another chapter. chibbi11@ymail.com.

This a great start to a very interestnig story. Love the details you are using (not assumed or typical) but not long winded. It makes for a smooth flow. So looking forward to more. Hopefully soon ;p

You are such a GREAT writer!

Really enjoying the story and the eroticism. Look forward to the next chapter Thanks