All Comments on 'Nothing to Offer'

Excellent story

Don't mind critics (remember, critics are critics because they can't be creators) I enjoy the journey through the story.

The only thing I dislike in this story is the MC’s fetish porn preferences. Otherwise, a good tale.

Britney is not at all high maintenance. Else, she wouldn’t have a marriage right under the arch.

Her heart is at right place.

She’s a bit finicky about hygiene, it seems.

I somehow feel a bit sad about Barbara. Josette’s a darling.

A well-written glimpse into the ups and downs of the everyday life we all endure. Good reading.

Fascinating slice of life.

Great story, and I think the bitches and bastards got burnt pretty well if you ask me.

It was great reading such a humorous tale. Loved it.

I like "Simon_Masters" suggestion, Very Funny idea.😂🤣

What's to complain about, it was a very enjoyable diversion from reality and brought a smile to my heart. And the bitch did indeed get burned by her own and her parents hands. Thanks again for another good story.

Damn but you can write, hear?

Average as had to start skipping over the computer sex shit.

Actually, it worked a treat, I'd like to think Bri & Brit got to adopt the two children of Barb, and Glen dies of an abcessed prolapsed anus.

I was thoroughly enjoying the comedy created by the woes of the ex wife and be husband, until it went dark with the death of the grandmother, but it was still a fine tale.

What an insightful story. The conversations and banter are hilarious. Well developed plot and works out so that pain finds the right people! The language is unique to this author and does not need editing. It is what it is . 5*s.

Brilliant on how you jump around so much and then connect them all together.

Very good. I think people are too harsh on Britney. Most of her demands are banter, not real demands. She does not push them The only thing she brings up more than once is the sports car, and that is not done in a demanding way.

Not sure why commenters are so down on Britney. Yes she is driven and kind of high maintenance but she is devoted to Brian, adores him, is fun to be with, and loyal beyond measure. Also she apparently sucks cock like a sex-crazed succubus. So there is that going for her ...

Good story, not enough well-described sex.

I know Britney seems spoiled, but I think things will work out for them, and they will work together, with her spoiled "just enough," because they love each other, and not ruinously, because Brian is not a pushover nor an idiot.

I liked the way the father-in-law was made to pay for his daughters divorce, and Barbara went on to get everything she deserved, well done, great story.

I read your stories for my pleasure. You post them so that I (others too) may enjoy them... and I do. Thank you. They give me comfort on really bad days (like today), and lift me higher on good ones (which thankfully is more often). Did I say thank you? It not enough to convey my pleasure in reading your works, but, I wanted to share my appreciation. TJ

No Ferrari, no pussy!! Really, withholding sex for a fancy car.....just another greedy bitch like Barbara!! This needs a part 2 of 'loving wives' where the needy immature Britney's obsession with material things leads her to cheat

Britney seems like a high maintenance brat!!

As for Barbara, she was such an arrogant loser

There were so many words missing from conversations that it was hard to decipher. It did get some better as the story went on. So many characters that had no use in the story just caused more confusion. You have great talent and bravery for putting stories here to be torn apart by assholes. I really try to be fair and objective and not overly critical. I've read other stories of yours. You usually do better than this.

It kinda feels unfinished though,,,,,, but i could be wrong.

The story was a bit confusing but I really liked Brian and Britney you can tell they are in love I really liked that.

i have to admit I don't like this story as much as some of his stories. it jumped back and forth too much for me. plus Brian seemed a little clueless and too easily led by the nose by women.

All the detailed porn references diluted the story. A bit, I can understand, and they sure set a tone, a rhythm, and their diminishing mark the rise of something so much better. But maybe not to this extent. However, the great writing, the compelling story and the manifold comparisons between these parallel lives, overcomes this minor quibble. GREAT storytelling! Bonus points for 'shrimp poboy'. Oh, if only Jax was still in business to wash down that poboy!

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But the borderline freakin' bloody genius of your writing in this story is epitomized by this typical example: "Better hope you don't wind up in Mumphrey," Bubba said. "Food there's the worst fucking shit in the state. "Lafayette ain't bad; they give you less than two years? That's where you'll probably go. Or, if you can prove you nuts? Paulton. They got pretty good food there too." Damn, that adds so much, ta yo writin' cha'! So many of your sentences are dripping with that soft Cajun brogue, infused with that self-deprecating sense of humor that's so indicative of a culture whose second great characteristic, aft'a the bes' food in da world, is their own absolute comfort inside their own skins. No place else in the US is there any people that are quite like the Cajuns. So much so, that their inimitable culture, sense of family and bonhomie, have actually suffused so many of their 'English' brethren in Arcadia. Your writing perfectly captures that whole unique feel and encapsulates this vivid tale. The side-by-side comparisons, especially the contrasts both subtle and stark, make this a classic, one of the top 100 stories I've ever read.

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Anybody what don't like this story needs to stick to reading the stuff written on men's room stalls. Easily a 5++++++++++/5!!!! An' den some, cha'!

Loved it. Tremendous. Great humour mixed with such pain..both deserved and not. Poor Josette.....she will have no chance given her parents and grandfather. Grandmother the saving grace maybe. Top stuff. TC Ireland.

Loved this story. The showing all angles made it golden, seeing the ex-wife and her family having regret after regret while the husband's life kept improving. Feel bad for the little girl Josette, almost wondering if it would turn out she was Brian or somehow Brian and Britney would adopt her. Great story, 5 stars and faved.

Best writer in Lit.

Have to admit I read most of the "Loving Wife" stories for either a laugh at the stupidity or for the way justice and revenge was administered. This one has both and rates a solid "5". I admit I enjoyed it and look forward to more. Could we have a sequel?

This stunning five-star story will stay with me for a long time. Thank you for sharing your immense talent as a story teller with us.

I laughed at the comments by avidfa below! What a “dickhead” he is, lmao! This was another great story. It was a little longer than usually but it was well worth the read. JimBob, don’t worry about senseless comment by such lowlifes. They are just jealous of your writing skills. Keep them coming.

Very good and lovely and wonderful story. He not only didn't take or plan anything to get back to his ex wife. He just move on let karma do the job.... God sure work in a mysterious ways. Definitely a 5 star 🌠🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 rating

I liked the story very much.

A self centered piece of shit got her own in the end. Her so called wastrel husband got a nice young lass and the shrew got a prisoner who will do a long time in jail.

The only thing that would make this story even better is if the shrew committed suicide, her father lost everything and Brian ended up adopting Josette and her enjoying a good and happy life.

Uneducated, amoral, lazy, disrespectful people don't wind up well. But we can never be sure of that, so every one of JB's stories fishes deep into the septic tank to examine in minute, painful detail yet another example that follows the rule.

You can save a lot of time if you just bang your thumb with a hammer instead of reading one more of his tales of misery. You get roughly the same result.

Not a happy ending for little Josette.

I liked how I was never sure where this was going. The story went for a walk and took me along with it.

A Great read!. Thankyou.

Another great tale - 5*

This author is amazingly creative. I love his always five star stories.

Gotta feel for Josette. Seems like the few minutes she spent with Brian and Britney was the happiest time of her life. Gonna be an ordeal growing up with a narcissistic dysfunctional mom and shallow grandparents. Great story.

Perfect.

You’ve written a really good story with a terrible ending.

Thankyou!

The idiot got thrashed and had hell for a life. The good guy had a wonderful life, yada yada yada. What I did NOT like was an older man younger woman story. I don't read them. Great fantasy for us older guys like me, but reality will slap the shit out of you. IF and only IF she is a sexual woman when she is in her prime and ready to rock and roll you her loving husband will be ready to roll over and go to sleep. How's that for a run on sentence.LOL!!!

You're getting better. The sex is starting to take a back seat to the story plot. I don't think this story jumps around, not as much as some of yours do!

It's been a couple of weeks, but I think I can read your entire collection.

Thank you.

I love the fact that she thinks he can't go a day with out thinking he's thinking about her.

I have read this story for the 4th time and I still think it's awesome. You are so right the best revenge is sometimes just living right

Yes it was very predictable, but I couldn't stop reading it!

I will add my voice to the others. I couldn't stop til I was finished the story. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Thank you for a very nice and pleasant read. Lots of good humor intertwined through out the story line, at least I thought so. I had a good laugh on almost every page. Thanks again for the entertainment. Gotta LOVE Brittany!!

Real people making others genuinely happy with being decent and others being genuinely self-centered. Just like real life.

Interesting: I would say that the story was written to be deliberate and evenly paced. Kind of like Brian's life and the reward was good.

What's not to like about this story?

I got the point of the story at about page 3. The slow descent of Glen, the selfishness of Barbara, the greed and envy of Barbara's parents and the consistent behavior of Brian were aptly described. The next 5 pages became redundant and eventually boring.

I'll just take this time to respond to the author's notes even though this story is 4 years old and I doubt the author will read this.

Yes, you do need an editor. Not super-uber-ungodly bad, but yeah, you could use one. And no, you don't need to be a professional author to get one. Hell, I'll do it for free just to pass the time.

Yes, it jumps around a bit, perhaps quite unnecessarily and somewhat annoyingly, but the story is still quite easy to follow. While there are multiple categories this story could fall under (Romance, Erotic Coupling, perhaps even first time if Britney was a virgin), Loving Wives was still appropriate. It wasn't hard to keep track of people if the reader would isolate the main people from the side characters, although the extra stuff that Brian was reading online may throw some people off.

I, personally, am a big, big fan of BTB. But this story is a true example of the adage "The best revenge is a life well lived." Brian got knocked down. All he did was pick himself up and kept on moving. Did his thing, didn't look back, and life turned out great for him. Didn't even care about how Barbara was doing. They're not married, what does he care? No, this isn't quite BTB, but it is an example of karma revenge. And personally, I like karma just as much as I like BTB.

All that aside, I thought it was a great story. 5-stars and favored.

JMFC

There’s a handful of your stories I can read and reread. Great characters, great dialogue, and as always, one of a kind style I just can’t get enough of. Merci beaucoup.

I THOUGHT IT PRETTY GOOD. I LISTENED TO IT WITH MY TEAXTALOUD SOFTWARE, JENNIFER'S VOICE. DIDN'T HAVE TO EDIT ONE WORD. THANK YOU FOR A GOOD STORY AND ENDING!

There are some wonderful characters. Britney is lovable, Glen is hateable, and Joanne is believably shallow and stupid. 5*

1 star

Odd story, crazy style, but a great read. Thank you!

The scenes with Barbara, Glen, and Josette were so bleak... I just kept feeling sorry for that poor little girl growing up with such scum for parents.

An engaging, if rather depressing story.

Sweet story. 5*'s. No need to burn the bitch, Karma got her!

This is the sort of story I think that has JB44 on top of his game. A blue collar, working class guy, doing good things get rewarded. On the flip slide, the schemers don't get by so well. I often critique JB44 for having blue collar guys being secretly rich, this has it play out realisticly. Brian started a business after apprenticing, then moved methodically ahead. Great character development. The more stagnant characters, such as Barbara get justice for it.

This was an entertaining, believable slice of life. Take my 5 stars and have a splendid day!

uou write like my mind works. all over the place. slap hapy papy #9

When I started reading this like your some of your other stories I said 8 fckn pages but the characters and development would have suffered if it had been shorter. I admire Brian kept his dignity and wasn’t a prick. Barbara was obviously spoiled and manipulative and got what she deserves. Great read

That woman couldn't be more burnt if if her zip code was 'the sun'! And Brian didn't have to do anything. He kept his home, his business and his dignity. He found love with a chubby bunny. She lost everything and the spiral just keeps on going. This is one of your best (and I like most of your stuff). 5 stars. Thanks for writing. JPR

If Brian had any sense he would have gone for the mother ,not the obese daughter

Barbara was a B I T C H! She only cared about her own needs. She walked over and talked down to everyone who she met. She was a true Jewish Princess. In her parents minds she could do no wrong. Brian was a very nice guy who never asked for a handout from Barbara's parents, unlike Barbara's second husband the weasel. Brian was always attentive to his wife's needs and wants. He did love her. Unfortunately Barbara didn't love Brian. Comments by Somewhatniceguy show that he is a submissive who would love to be dominated by Barbara and her family! LMAO!

To Mr. Somewhat: So Brian and Britney are evil? I would love to read a story you write to see how you describe characters, both good ones and bad ones. I think Jimbob created some rounded ones for us to consider. Thanks to him.

everyone is a cruel character including Brian and worse is the bitch that he used to babysit; there's somehow this twisted belief that comes across in this as divine justice, as if God rewards the 'right' man with a young pussy; twisted...if anything. Barbara did nothing to Brittany and she doesn't deserve that from that young twisted bitch who is twisted enough to marry someone old enough to be her father. If Brian had had an ounce of decency he would've spurned her and went for her mother instead; somehow he must have thought it was God's for being right. If anything Brian is a good guy who gloats and claims 'oh yeah, I am a good man, see, god gave me a young pussy.' Barbara, if not for her parents, could've grown up to be a fine, young, comely homely girl, that girl is a typical housewife, and deserves to be given a second chance.' Her parents had spoilt her completely and made her the way she was and suddenly her mother goes all commie on her and expiates the virtue labor while she herself would continue to live a life of luxury and expect her daughter to wait tables; they made her daughter useless, taught her the wrong things, raised in her a closeted comfortable life and made her useless, and it is only right they owe it to her more than anyone else to take care of her. I loved Barbara, so innocent, so stupid, a person like that if she realizes how stupid she had been would kill herself; and for her sake that shouldn't happen. One of the most believable loving characters I have come across in recent times in Barbara. It is extremely difficult to go down from being rich to pauper; it is not her fault; it is her parents. I love Barbara, and I love to save her.

Everyone eventually got what they deserved: Brian gets happiness, a young wife, and good friends. Barbara gets constant frustration and money worries. Peters - well, he's in jail, who knows what he'll eventually get. Barbara's parents - they pay a lot of money, her dad is consumed with hatred. Yep, everyone got what they deserved.

i feel sorry for barbra's kids.

brian and the little girl hit it off from the start. wouldn't it be great if brian and brit would adopt the 2 kids. it would save the children from a miserable childhood and burn barneys ass.

wouldn't that make a good 2nd part to this?

i liked the story, just thought you ended it before it completely played out.

I had fun reading this. A smile on a Friday afternoon is not bad. Loved the over-the-top characters. Thanks.

After finally fixing my password I'm logged in and can comment, I enjoy your work, yep an editor might help but i like your stories and I'm just going down the list. Thanks for sharing. Like to see some more recent one but I'm not done with the list of stories so you have time, LOL

...and I'll say it again. Love your style man.

'Tonight would not be number three' actually made me laugh out loud.

Great - and original - stuff dude. Please keep writing.

It was a little long and meandering--impossible to know exactly where it was going to go, and that was the fun!

Plus it was very funny. Thanks so much!

ohio

Barbara and Glen are two of the funniest characters I've read in my life. Unintentionally I am sure, but I laughed reading their stuff. I seriously hope there will be a part 2!

Could of added more to the ending, like Brian and Britney gettng custody of little Josette, or of Barbra getting a job working in one of Brian's Dry Cleaning stores, or of both scenarios.

that her parents will be willing to take custody of the kids to keep them from ending up in foster care...?

Think her mom feels bad for the life she's caused her grandchildren to be relegated to because she thought so poorly of Brian...?

Clearly neither Barbara nor her father will ever admit any guilt or responsibility for her life and that of her children...

Nice story...

id pay to read stuff like this, interesting, tittilating, funny, life in a small town, brilliant.

The only reason I gave this 4 stars instead of 5 was because the future of Josette and the upcoming baby was left unclear. Glen obviously doesn't give a shit about being a father, and Barbara isn't much better. While it was good to see them end up as miserable as they were, I can't help but see dark clouds on the horizon for those kids.

... but reading this made ME happy.

I loved this story so much, I just had to come by a 3rd time... That bitch name KARMA gave zero fucks...😜..I would've loved to see how she was going to possibly use her baby to trap Brian😂😂😂😂... Once burned twice shy--how this braindead slut thought Brian would welcome her back with open arms and move her and her brats into his home/BANK ACCOUNT is HILARIOUS‼️ 😂😂😂😂😂😂.. I don't understand why she was still angry with him? He had nothing to offer her, he freed her to find her better offer, it's not his fault she left a king for a bum...bitch never knew she had it so good... Awesome story...❤️❤️❤️❤️😏

I knew a woman like Barbara once, many, many years ago. She was about 40 years old at the time and quite pudgy. Evidently she had been pretty when she was in her teens and quite morally ambiguous too. All she did was sit at the Apartment Pool and eat and smoke and drink wine. Oh, and wonder out loud as to why her face was round, her skin wrinkled and stretched tight and she had a deep, raspy yet curiously whiny voice. Was glad when I moved. She ruined many a weekend by the pool.

This was a fairly over the top story, but that's okay I don't read these stories to get the evening news, I want to be distracted a bit from time to time.

Nothing to offer, very poor. 1 *

I found the characters appropriate, although Glen and Barbara were a tad bit over the top. Not inaccurately portrayed, just emphasized slightly more than the rest of the cast.

Brian and Britney were delightful and reliable. You just know she's going to push the window and she does, delightfully so.

I've read it several times now, and enjoyed it every time.

As for the editing, it could use some. I'll volunteer if you think it would help.

Yes. It jumped around a bit and there were a few things a spell check would not have caught, but it is a great story that reflects the best revenge is a life well lived. This puts it clearly in exactly the right category. Good job! I love it.

Liked it a lot.

I liked it and found some of the characters interesting, too.

Came back for a retread. Still felt like a Texas highway; long, flat, with an occasional interesting tidbit.

I read HDK's comment. Man, that was like the kiss of death.

Jedd Clampett

To me it was not all that entertaining and I think it was because all the characters were oddballs that I could not relate to or feel any sympathy for. Also, the double parallel story lines was weird, inventive but weird.

But I couldn't sympathise with the characters.

I liked it. It was an enjoyable reading. Ok I will agree the porn site surfing was over the top but then I think and laugh and say am I any different reading stories on this site. So with a smile, I assume JimBob44 was poking fun at all of us the readers and himself for being on a porn site. A solid 4 stars if you care.

Yes do keep writing what you want for your pleasure. I will keep reading for my enjoyment of your effort. Thanks for sharing. I am glad you don't let negative assholes who like to post rude comments or emails get you down. None have ever written a story or likely put themselves out for any critiques. Poor sad little people who enjoy tearing down - maybe it is the only way they can feel 'special' ;).

I love how your stories fit together - other characters making cameos. Please keep writing!

Interesting and enjoyable, The multivoice presentation at the end was different.

Excellent story, thank you for sharing it with us. Five stars and every one well deserved.

I also hope that Brian breaks the bad luck relationship schtick that apparently is a historic thing in his family.

You continue to produce interesting erotic tales. You are getting better with each outing. You are proving that quality fiction resides at Literotica.