On the Loveseat Ch. 05

To much false modesty at this point by all of them. It is almost silly.

I can see this going farther and adding more characters.

Ridiculous escalating. It was at least somewhat believable until this chapter, but you just forced the action too much. And what the hell did you add that random woman for? So out of left field.

Hope Jeremy got all three woman pregnant too.got my mom and aunt pregnant I even turned both mom and her sister Rachel into lezzies where go down on each other while fuck them bareback cum in their cunts and ass even had some friends over fuck them too

He was really being sexist at the point when he said he had 'power' over them. It was pathetic of him and the women should've shown him that wasn't right. He was being controlling when he talked to his mom (who said he was being manipulative). I don't care he said he loved her, that was him being a jerk. The women need to change that shit. And no damn spanking, that's a dick move by guys who do that to women.

I'm surprised at negative comments...to each is own, the more the merrier, I say,

I love what you're doing with these first time encounters, (pool party was a masterpiece) I've read here for years and yearn for m/s incest group, it's all too rare. You have a real knack for the dialogue and some of the scenes you paint are well, memorable.

Pretty much all the stories on here are, shall we say, unlikely but possible enough to allow you to enjoy the story. I don't understand the criticisms, this was a 3 page barn burner, I loved the dialogue and antics of the 3 women. Marie's comments hugely contributed to the scene you painted.

Don't be discouraged by the naysayers, great imagination and good writing skills, thanks for sharing!!!

Chapter 5 when the mother and aunt started making out 🤢. That shit was neither erotic nor sexy. It was just off putting and gross!

Jeremy you are a immature ass especially at 18. You should know better, to pit your mom against your aunt and with another woman. Don't you know that this could blow up in your face and now I know that this your imagination is very sick and deluded and not realistic. Your incest imagination has gone from reality total you wish this would happen

Great story you know when nephew fucks his aunt then his mom I know I fucked both sisters and at the sametimw I them both pregnant. When found out they were I had big smile. My mom said to my aunt looks like your marriage is over my aunt said I know. Told her you can move in with us we have king size bed plus I said two milfs that are sisters. I even get to see them in 69 position I get to fuck them in the ass. When shoved it in their ass they screamed stop I didn't care I just kept fuck their asses till unloaded in the ass now they do gangbangs together with 12 guys bareback they even end up getting pregnant 4 times each.they both have 45 dd chests and real thick cunt hair too goes from top of cunt to top of crack of ass.

we met in Chapter 01?

its hot as fuck plz keep going

Every story devolves from an accidental sexual touch to full blown fuckfest with strangers in a matter of pages. Yawn.

JUST. KEEP. WRITING. NO MATTER WHAT PEOPLE TELL YOU.

First of all, loved the story and gave 5 stars on all chapters except the last, which I gave 4 for adding in Marge and stopping before the mom/son intercourse. I know there have been comments saying "Marge was needed to egg mom and aunt on to have intercourse", but I disagree...mostly. It could still have ended up with sex, it just might have taken a bit longer, which would have allowed you to write more chapters!

Constructive criticism: When writing a short story for Literotica, keep two things in mind: #1: Have some kind of "payoff" (sex act) toward the end of a chapter to prevent reader frustration. #2: Don't get carried away and add TOO much in one chapter (if writing a multiple chapter story). Always leave room for advancing the "taboo" further.

The way I saw this story going in my head was that in Chapter 5, he would get willing blowjobs from his mom and aunt, the end. Chapter 6: He decides he wants to return the favor and has to figure out a way of getting his aunt to allow him to eat her pussy. Maybe this also leads to him eating his mom's pussy also. (throughout these chapters there's still the threat of his mother forcing an end to the whole thing out of guilt). Chapter 7: He stops by his aunt's house, which ends up with them having full-blown sex, which the mother either walks in on, or finds out about. The mother is conflicted by her desire to be fucked by that huge cock, and how "wrong" it would be... Maybe the son rubs his boner against her while she's doing dishes or something. (I actually thought the kitchen scene would be him pushing up against his mother from behind, embracing her and rubbing his hard-on in her buttcrack, rather than him dropping drawers and demanding a hand job).

Obviously you can't change the story now. Those were just examples of how you might have paced it out to last longer. Food for thought in future stories, as it were. Keep in mind also that often it's the small taboo things that are the sexiest to read about. I found it much hotter to read about the under-the-blanket (taboo/sneaky/forbidden/might get caught/don't know how to react) handjobs and fingering than the full-blown naked sex scenes (of which there are an abundance on Literotica).

All in all, I loved the story, appreciate you taking the time and effort to write it and post it here, and strongly encourage you to continue writing!