All Comments on 'One Man's Journal Ch. 01'

...with the constant bantering about a boyfriend it seemed that was going to be the crux of a fantasy but it was real so now her behavior is just schizoid.

Has he ever heard of changing the locks???

I'm glad that she came off as a little crazy.

It is still early morning when she leaves. You're right in that we don't know where she is going exactly when she leaves, perhaps a brunch date? I don't know, but thanks for the feedback, definitely.

Looong run-on sentences in sort of stream of consciousness writing bereft of style. Hard to read.

Thanks for the feedback, but this series is intended to be Brandon's journal, which allows a certain freedom with run on sentences, stream of thoughts, etc. but I will definitely keep that in mind.