All Comments on 'Our Holiday Real Couple'

What's with the present tense shit? It may have been hot, who knows. When it's that badly written, we'll never know. Couldn't get past the second paragraph.

Don't write any more

A couple having fun...but it could be better...In content and with details: 1st - her husband's name was Ozzy or Usman? 2nd - Even if we can admit the beach was deserted, being late, how was possible for the ship's deck to be deserted in a 4 hours journey (That's the time for a cruise between Gran Canaria and Tenerife)? why the need of a cabin? Cabins are used only in longer cruises between Gran Canaria and mail land Spain (longer than 2 days travel) 3rd - They had fucked bareback in the beach, why suddenly the need for a condom (ok...even flavored) in the ship? Didn't she liked the cum's flavor? But the writer must keep trying, being this the first attempt...2*

How many people are there in the story?

I did see a train wreck, yikes.

You are a very beautiful sexy women. Thanks you for sharing that smoking hot photo!

...your best interest to get editorial help...both with content and presentation (spelling, grammar, character mapping, etc.).

I liked the idea of it, but struggled with the many, many inconsistencies, errors and variances that prevented enjoying the experience as I should have.

Thanks, but please get some help.

Great that husband and wife can't get enough of each other, but there is no subtleness nor drama nor romance. Kind of just monkey fucking with others providing the inspiration.

illiterate cuck shit.

cuck shit.

Why read cuck shit than? You see it's loving wives. Read romance you negative mother fucker.

poor grammar, poor spelling, story is below average pacing is all wrong- overall really not good.