by naughty_emma
good idea. The changes in talking styles of the characters is bit offputting. The over use of dialogue and lack of description during the intercourse is disappointing. Also the end. I know for men it ends with the climax but there is no finish. I know its to be continued but still...
Liked your use of setting and builds herein lass. Where is the rest of this tale please.... Not going to nitpck here lass but ahve a few thoughts will send via feedback. Need to reheat my coffee this morn, somehow it went cold grinz
was very well written, kinda confusing about the time frame; but everything else made up for that little bit. lol.
What a fine piece of writing. It had none of the flaws that detract from the story or turn something that ought to be beautiful into something disgusting or completely unbelievable. I loved the language, the tone, the restraint, it was erotic, arousing, fascinating, it ranks way up there I wish every story could borrow from it.
A father fucking his daughter is good. Doing it with the mother watching is better. Doing it to make the daughter pregnant is the best. I imagined their doing it again and again and again. I judge the rating of the story by how hard my cock gets while I'm reading it and how good my cock feels when I jack it to the story. This story got a 10. It felt great.
the temperature went up about 20 degrees in here. Wow, that was steaming hot. Terrific story, thanks.
The writing reminds me a great deal of the tales of the incestuous heroine, Eveline. Eveline's cousin was a girl named Emma, and Eveline tricked Emma into having sex with her own father. I love erotic stories written in Victorian-style prose.
Loved your story, it was excellent. Please, please write more and post it here.
so ssssssssssseeeeeeeeeeeeexxxxxxxxxxxxyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
You have to get more of this story on line. Maybe momma can join in and get some of her little girl too.
You are a fantastic writer.
I've always thought incest stories were hot, but I especially love the idea of father impregnating daughter/son impregnating mother. Please write more...enjoy masturbating while reading naughty stories. Oooohhhhh, so horny....
very hot, i am very horney now well written can't wait for more of your story, I'll be watching out for more , thanks
Wonderful, lovely, exciting, enthrralling, ereective. Makes my cock hard.
Amazing, you have made a taboo subject into an extremely loving one. Your descriptions are beautiful. You sincerely turned on the theater of my mind to the point that in my minds eye I was an avid voyeur enjoying every movement to the fullest, I was right there with mama.
I also don't mind admitting that I too was so excited that I brought about my own orgasm. Thank you.
I would love to read future writings of yours, on this or other similar situations.
I really liked it and i liked how you really played on the desire and how you make it so taboo but, on a more editorial level, it was very very repetitive and you lead up to such a pathetic bang in the sex scene... i still got off tho, good job!
A wonderful story which expresses the fantasy of my cyberlover and me so much better than we could eer hope too... please let there be more! Please, Emma!
Beautiful writing style. Not too flowery, but a wonderful sense of the time period.
I am still cumming, my tummy having orgasm aftershocks. Please hurry with future installments.
This is undoubtedly one of the most believable, yet highly erotic stories I have read in a very long time. It is charged with electricity, simplicity, lust and love so cleverly interwoven. This is surely the beginning of a well worthwhile series - please do continue.
very nicely written, good characterizations and wonderfully erotic build-up
Absolutely awesome story!! I can't wait to read more, please write quickly. Can't wait to read about her growing with pregnancy and then the moment when she gives birth for her parents. God I am so soaking wet now after reading this. Wow!!
WOW! Soooooooooooooooo delicous, can't wait for the next chapter!!!
I just finished reading this story and am so hot I can hardly type this---just gasping and moaning with lust! I love this story and look forward to its continuation!
Loved the story. Hope it continues. Would love to see other screwing their daughter....
Keep it up...;)