All Comments on 'Paul Solves a Problem'

I really liked the pace of your first ever story! Keep going especially with the anal fucking ;)

If the character is a virgin, who told him he looks good naked then?

Not bad for a first effort, but the proper name for the finger next to your thumb is Index finger.

The use of first person, present tense may annoy some readers but it worked well enough here. If you continue this story keep it the same.

A really nice start - please continue!

...and a good start.

You do need to put some more effort into proof reading and editing.

Maybe get some other eyes on, before you submit.

Issues with the difference in meaning between:

Then and than,

They're, their and there

Spelling 'piling' as 'pilling' was pretty obvious.

Finally, you don't 'relish in the taste', rather you simply 'relish the taste'.

Some annoying for how obvious and/or careless they are, others, just demonstrating a need for proofing and editing.

But make no mistake, we all want to be Paul this afternoon!

Please continue.

Hot! I was reading this and wriggling around with wet pleasure. You're a hell of a great writer, and if this is your first try? Keep going with it. You're a Natural!