All Comments on 'Pay It Forward Ch. 06'

This is good. I'm excited to see what happens next.

This story just keeps getting better and better. from a writer that really has a true gift of writing . seem you have come a long way . from your first story.

till now. dont give up from the real dream you started with till what you have become today . you just got better with each part of this incredible exciting story.

another very good chapter I can not wait to read the next

Hopefully Gianni's mom will mention her concerns to Shaun and Delia. Shaun will get to the bottom of it.

Still catching up.....it's a really good story

When Gianni was first introduced, it was stated the he was Italian. In this chapter, his mother addressed him as "mijo" which is a Spanish term of endearment...

it really drives me crazy on this site how people can't get Italians and spanish speaking people straight! We're told Gianni is Italian, then his brothers are given spanish names (Jose and I can't remember what). Then his mother calls him 'mijo'; which as the other anon said, is Spanish. These things matter... And all it takes is a bit of research on Google prior to writing. Otherwise, nice story but please please spend a little time on details- they make the story more believable and stronger.

... "His voice, hos touched reached deep inside her and calmed her inner c=beast. "

I'm not sure what that sentence meant but an editor would have drawn your attention to it and had you clarify it.