All Comments on 'Payback - Ten Fold'

Yes, yes - read the disclaimer - no negative feedback about the plot but this reads just like a typical JPB effort. No character development and no one to like in this predictable effort. Frankly, these two unlikeable characters are better off without each other based upon the plot devices used to lead the reader to this conclusion. Better luck next time and if the author does not want a lot of negative feedback, put this type of story in a different category [bad news is this site does not provide for a "cluck or wimp category only"]. Debra and Wayne

like a fucking hot potato. Two wrongs never make a right. This little power trip of hers makes her as wrong, no, more wrong than he. This story is done as far as I'm concerned, you can make him take more...you will probably make him even like it but when stories take such a dramatic turn from real life they no longer interest me.

I didn't finish reading your story, simply because it didn't turn me on, though I do enjoy some cuckold themes. However, I LOVED the disclaimer you put right at the top! Excellent idea to limit the amount of bullshit comments that accompany cuckold stories. If the idiots realize right from the beginning that it's a cuckold story, and they don't like the genre, why the fuck do they keep reading? I read enough of the story to see that you're a good writer, and don't let the idiots tell you differently. Please keep posting!

Now isn't that a smart ass statement. You didn't like this story, but yet you bitched about the other readers who felt the same way you do. Yes, I didn't read this story either, because of the disclaimer. Authors are finally getting smart with preface warnings,since the editors of this site haven't got the foggiest idea in what category to put cuckold stories. But what gives you the right to call readers idiots, must have taken lessons from Harry. You're the idiot for making such an stupid statement. Grow up.

Pretty good and compelling up to the point at which dear hubby unzips!

Really... there should be a different category for this type of story...

It is too sad...both of them are too screwed up. All I see is you taking the characters deeper and deeper into revenge and pain. For me, the hot sex you write about can't cover the pain and destruction it causes on both of them. So....guess I really didn't much like where you took us, nor the way she walked away from him. She is right...perhaps he needs to just leave, for both of their sakes. Not giving up is the same as saying "go ahead and prolong the pain"!

Great story and well written. Enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing.

ZERO

the husband asking can we get back to "normal" PROVES that this author being BI or Gay does not " get" straight men.

While the husband's affair went on longer it was private. And the wife did not see or hear what went on all nigh.... like the husband did.

Yet the wife says it is still NOT even and the husband says OK dear.... whatever. What is the significance of her cooking breakfast for the 2 guys Naked?

that act has serious meaning and it means this marriage is over .

The wife saying "I want to work on my marriage" while she says good bye to the 2 guys cocks may be the dumbest fucking thing ever written in the history of Literotica.

the wife saying I may fuck around on you again but I am here and that counts for something... is absurd.

Oh sure it counts for something --that she wants to stick his face in it... NOT that she still has feelings her for.

This marriage is over

Excellent writing style. Obviously, the husband was pretty insecure. Most people that aren't lacking in character don't need to screw outside the marriage let alone stand by and allow their wives to screw others for any reason. Also, I believe the wife has some anger issues. She should probably enroll in some anger management classes. I guess what I'm saying is, that both characters are pretty typical of the people in the world today. However, I disagree with HarryinVa (no surprise there). Gay relationships have all the joy and pain as hetro relationships. In fact, it's been my experience that gays on the whole are a lot more empathetic than the majority of hetros. Especially, the male gender. If you don't believe me just read the comments in the Loving Wives section. At least 80% are as empathetic as a pile of potatoes. Of course, most of those are projecting. Harry when you feel a strong dislike to someone or something you need to take a close look at yourself and ask why you feel so strongly about this. Maybe your a homophobe. Maybe because you realize that you would do the same thing as the characters did in these circumstances and it hurts to look at it. Most people when they take a strong dislike to someone of something it's because they see their own faults and are consciously unaware of the reason only the emotion. People need to be more forgiving and remember it's only fiction, that just happens to mimic real life but still fiction. Again, well written story. You express emotions very well with your writing but then your gay so it comes natural:) I wonder if "Ohio" is gay. Another great writer. Hmmm

Get off the PC horse ... no one is impressed.

You stated

....Gay relationships have all the joy and pain as hetro relationships. In fact, it's been my experience that gays on the whole are a lot more empathetic than the majority of hetros. Especially, the male gender......

I never said anything that could be remotely construed otherwise. In fact that I totally agree with you here. However I would argue that MOST of that time the empathy is NOT towards the straight hetro male. And we all know this for the most part to be the case.

.....If you don't believe me just read the comments in the Loving Wives section. At least 80% are as empathetic as a pile of potatoes......

I dont what you are talking about and it is clear YOU have no idea what the fuck you are talking about either. A large % of LW stories are cuck stories then there are the reconciliation at all costs stories... and only a small % of the stories are written by straight "Ordinary" within the bell curve men...

.....of course, most of those are projecting. Harry when you feel a strong dislike to someone or something you need to take a close look at yourself and ask why you feel so strongly about this. Maybe your a homophobe....

or may I have a brain and you dont. Maybe I dont like idiot plots which feature extreme actions that have NO reaction or consequences.

Look at all the other stories this author has written... and you will a distinct pattern.

forcing a cheating husband to watch will she gets payback is pretty extreme by itself. Forcing him to watch while she fucks 2 guys while claiming she wants to work on marriage then claiming the right to keep fucking other men...

and getting NO reaction --NONE!!!! -from the straight hetro husband is fucking absurd.

No stright married man that loves his wife or has a shread of self respect is still there, she burnt the marriage to the ground than pissed and shit on it, than told him to eat it, and there would be more tomorrow. They best he could do is say sorry and walk away, the worst is kill three people, but something would have happened. This author needs to stick with what he knows and hetro relationships isn't it. This is worse than Matt M.

your in the wrong category, you should put this in gay male or fetish since we all know thats where its going.

you should also find an editor since your too busy jerking off to actually write a coherent story.

There are little if no grammatical errors in this story. As someone who can not even properly spell the words "weird" or "cliche" you are hardly in a position to give grammatical advice. You are simply another hater of the genre and I could care less.

As to HarryVA - the profile states bi, not gay, though I don't expect a homophobe to know the difference.

As for all the bitching about the category, guess what - the editors want these stories HERE. Unless the story actually contains male on male sex, it is going straight to LW. I can post it to any genre on the board, but it will end up here if I like it or not. Send your complaints to them.

The best I can do for all you cuckold/gay/bi hating people is post a disclaimer in the beginning to allow you the option of simply ignoring what you loathe so much. Why you all choose not to excersize that option is beyond me. If you hate Chinese food, what are you doing at Lee Ann Chin? It is YOU standing on MY lawn taking a shit, not the other way around.

In the introduction to this story you wrote, "This story is a cuckold story. If you do not like those stories or all of the "faggy" things they entail, do yourself the favor and stop reading now. You have a fair warning."

This is definitely not what I find interesting or sexual in any way. So I gave it a pass. When this disclaimer leads into the story, why do so many people get upset by the content?

he should divorce Lexi, marry Michelle and the two of them can torture Lexi in new creative ways.

I thought you were exaggerating with your cuckold introduction - not true. After the first half of the first page, I realized that this was not something I would enjoy reading. I cannot comment on the whole story, but in this section found your writing skills above average.

Tell a decent story, this is overfuck from the wife to a wimp husband!! Pathetic really!

There is no story,just mindless prattle about nothing. Didn't anyone told you before that you have to be literate in order to write??? Pathetic and repulsive,just like your mind !!!

the whole lot of them

I read your bio before I decided to write this. I understand your submissive nature.

In most Lit stories the author attempts to stay within reasonable boundaries of human nature and probabilities.

In this story, you indicated that he had cheated and the wife was now going to humiliate him. This guy, while feeling he deserved her revenge, would not have tolerated this. He would have dragged her out, took her home and told her if she wanted to humiliate him, do it by herself. Not doing that, he would have beat the hell out of these arrogant asses!

No real man would tolerate this. If she was so bent on hurting him, he would have admitted he fucked up and just left - he lost her.

Thanks anyway!

Turned six feet under hopefully! Gotta love these female writers and the fantasy perception of men LMAO

Great job. Love the story and ending

Your marriage is a train wreck. Besides your wife has turned into a slut.

Not enough info for the reader to really hate him; other than the fact that he is the wimpiest cuck I've read about here. She however, is one mean, unforgiving slut that deserves a slow, painful demise.

EVEN if a man cheats, what makes him a man is self-centeredness. As such, when the wife carries on at the bar and offers sex with the strangers for $200.00, that is the cue for hubby to exit, stage left.

Go home, call your brothers and family, pack up your stuff, sign over the deed on the house/living quarters, quit your job, and move on with your life.

You wouldn't be the first son living over their parent's garage with no job!

Anything's more dignified than what you had cooked up in your tiny peanut brain!

A lot of us don't understand Gay, that doesn't mean we are homophobic, may be SHITphobic (shit on dick you know?)... bloody father-fuckers!

an interesting premise.

The author did a great job of getting me more and more pissed off as the story developed.I wasn't pissed at the author but rather at the dopey husband,Tony.

As soon as Lexi started acting like a slut with those guys in front of guys he knew at the bar,he should have disassociated himself and called her a cheap slut,whore etc! At that point he couldn't keep her from destroying the marriage,but he could have saved face at the bar. ~ Once he accepted that Lexi was a cheating cunt,he should have waited awhile,quietly slipped into his house and videoed/took pics of his soon to be ex being a sucking,fucking slut. ~ Aside from being useful to counteract his cheating with Michele,he would now be able to post them on a number of different internet sites as well as attach video and pics to e-mails he'd send to ALL of her co-workers,friends,family,etc.

But not this dumb fuck,NO,he's setting himself up for more hurt and punishment as the "Legend of Lexi: A Cunt for all Seasons" is certain to continue as the saga painfully continues.

the next part should settle all debts, TK U MLJ LV NV

U got to be shitting me, NO man I mean No man would put up with her shit.

But the content of the story was disgusting at best, sickening, no doubt.

There should be a special chapter for these "twisted and perverted" disgusting

stories so that we "normal" sexual deviants" do not have to be unwittingly

exposed to such perversions.

1 star. Wish I could give it less.

cuck shit.

I can't feel sorry for Tony. If Lexi has five men overpower him and tie him down and do a gangbang with his best pool friends in front of him, put him in a chastity cage, dress him up in pink panties and have him chemically castrated, and become pregnant and not know who the actual father is...Tony would deserve it. But her revenge has ruined her standing in the community. I look for the community to rally behind Tony now.

Divorce the bitch...leave her to her on devices. Let her get her payback without you being there. See where that gets her. Leave the area and her without any contact information. She can't rub it in your face if she can't get hold of you.

Loved the story line and the visuals. I don't understand people on here.there are thousands of stories. If you don't like one go on to another. I hope you have more like this. I especially liked the scene with them throwing her clothes out the windows at him.

There are better ways to make him pay than fucking around trying to get an STD.

Any he is a stupid wimp, as she is going to fuck those pussy hounds anyway why didn't he go out take the car go home lock the house so they couldn't get in, at least they she wouldn't be able to do it in the marriage bed. Next day get a locksmith to change the locks and put a lock on the bedroom door. Put a stop on her credit cards so he's not paying for her fucking around. That's for starters.

throw the whore out that is all she deserves

Shit.

*Slut wife, wimp husband

who reads and comments on all of these stories because his whore of a dead ex wife fucked him over his entire marriage. So he takes it out on thee writers.

Time for Tony to simply drive away. He'll know where he's going once he gets there. If this isn't reason enough for divorce, I see only murder or suicide in Tony's future. And I think Brian and Jesse are fakes. They haven't gone anywhere. They'll be back for more. I hope they hurt Lexi terribly bad or take her away for a whorehouse halfway across the world.

The only pile of shit that was bigger than this was a tale called 'Valentine's Interrupted'

I have to, respectfully, disagree with you. This story is, by far, the bigger pile of shit. V Valentines is really putred, but Turnt and this story take it to a new low.

Payback yes, this wussie needs to not reproduce. Slap happy papy #9

It's that simple.

Just divorce and be done no stupid life destroying paybacks...

If I could, minus one hundred stars.

he is stupid and so is she why are they together leave and get over it not much of a story

She's not getting even - she's getting ahead. Way ahead. By turning herself into a whore. I simply don't see how this is revenge. She's risking pregnancy, std's and aids by fucking a bunch of men bareback. How is risking her health revenge? She's fucked her way out of her marriage, where will she stop? This story has a bad premise. Nothing more, nothing less. By making the characters so unlikable you lose any chance for the overall story to be entertaining.

1 star

She's a superslut. Go find another one. Kick the bitch out.

I am very disappointed in the ending. Wife is clearly a slut. Hubby is a cheater who is now a cuckold... Too bad.

Is this stupid shit? This MF needs to grow a pair and get ride of the cunt!

Sorry, but this story was an EPIC FAIL.

toss the slut to the curb she is not worth having better wives around other than a whore

Both of them are fucking morons

All done but the paper work

SHITE POOR AUTHOR

Horrible CUCK story!!! Glad FTDS fixed it...

If that whore would have one those things to me and insult me like that, she and he whoremasters wouldn't understand how much trouble they were in. They would suffer greatly before they disappeared

FUKIN WIMP

He made his bed, now he gets to lie in it. Maybe next time he’ll think twice before having an affair.

As for Lexi, she either needs to forgive him or forget him. Revenge does nothing but eat away at you. It destroys your joy, your peace and your relationships.

And when you forgive, the person it frees…is yourself.

What a stupid story, no reality even close to real life…. Would she really turn herself into a gangbang whore to get even to a guy she doesn’t care about. Would you really stay with a wife whose best friend says be a whore, divorce your husband. This is just so ridiculous… stupid ridiculous……

why bother to stay with her ??

Tony deserved that.theirs a price to pay when you pop your manhood into another woman,you played payed.And with a woman who works next to her and is the daughter of the president of the company.Sorry I have no sympathy for Tony, as for this story.You might want to change it to loving husband.

Glad to see you stopped writing. Story sucked.