All Comments on 'Penance'

Please break your paragraphs.

They're way too long and detract from your story which was too hard to read because of it.

A refreshing tale.

Outstanding first story. So hot that it sizzles! Keep it up, as it were.

Very good!

Junot

http://curvesofmoon.blogspot.co.uk/

I have known you for 5 yrs now. And I forgot how detailed your writing truly is. I love it, Sun. I need to read the next one ASAP. I wish I could write stuff like this. WELL DONE!!!!

Very nicely done.