All Comments on 'Peter and Nick Ch. 01'

Same old nonsense. Will you newbies write something new for a change.

male carachters, intelligent both but rotten too. can't see anything erotic going on here. poor bastards have no connection to any kind of feelings.

Half way through I knew this guy was from the U.K.

Louise isn't the typical female that Nick is use to. She is more of into the country life style, but well educated. With her simple charms, and beautiful face and body, he is caught off guard by this intoxicating woman. I see a very erotic and sexual affair between them where either he wins her love and is complete in his life with her, or he just fucks her and treats her like a whore. I hope that he treats her with respect and seduces her to be in love with him and then falls for her. Thanks for this very well written start of a series,it looks like that it will be wonderful to read......Rich

You didn't seem to know where the story wanted to go, it was a little too wordy and ended blandly. But I'm sure you have developing skills and if you stick at it you're gonna produce something noteworthy...C+...Principal Mancelt.

....towards mediocrity without some background CHARACTER (I'm sick of that poster's misspelling) development.Pistolpackinpete

A bit of light dialog would turn it more exciting.

good story so far but please finish the story, you have left us hanging too long.

Too bad others felt the need to bad mouth it.

I like the character build up. I see in this story great originality.

True there is very little dialog but then again we dont spend time suffering thru crappy dialog.

I would like to see more of this story.

John

johnstang2@yahoo.com

Please continue

Would like to read more.