All Comments on 'Pillow Talk'

...but too long for my taste.

Loved it, but it reminded me a lot of my own "Get on your knees", which I wrote before you. I don't mind if it inspired you, if it did.

I love your writing anyway, but this is the best of the lot. There is not one superfluous word, the voice is consistent throughout and the vocab perfect (occasionally your metaphors, while beautiful, can be a little distracting). Also, it made me come twice which is always a plus.

I actually saw Pillow Talk in the Daddies anthology [Ed. Richard Labonte, 2009, Cleis Press]...good to see writers sharing their work here.

rubbish whats with the talk.?