All Comments on 'Playing Up Ch. 01'

by redzinger

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 7 years ago

Let's hope none of the other players caused an accident driving home because their designated Driver was off shagging... haha

Good story though

zukethecukezukethecukeover 10 years ago
I could see the whole scene through Sian's eyes

You did a very good job of putting us in her point of view. Of course, I could see it from Rob's, as well. Excellent sex, well arrived at.

NaokoSmithNaokoSmithalmost 11 years ago
7 pointer

I would add the conversion and another 2 points to my 5 stars if I could ;). What a hot start to a story! LOL.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Nice!

Very good! Certainly got my pulse racing.

secretdesires69secretdesires69almost 12 years ago
Well written

Your writing made it easy to read. I hope the next two chapters are just as good!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
An expert's opinion

TJ, you knocked the genre for six! Wonderful interplay and delightful mind games inserted in the eroticism. Bravo!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

knocking one out as i read.

dai self raising indeed

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

Amazing! 5* Rating for you TJ.

Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Time for a shower

To cool myself down

Ben de la Roubert

redzingerredzingerover 12 years agoAuthor
Author's update

Hiya,

Thank you for your marvellous comments.

Have just submitted a follow-up to this. Apologies for the delay in posting, it's been a horrible year in real life. I'm getting back into the writing now, I'm laid up so don't have much else to do! Oh well.

rz x

Gus AsparGus Asparalmost 13 years ago
very nice!

Hot story - I'll be dreaming of her tonight!

AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
*****

Five.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
Hot Hot Hot.

Fantastic story. I wouldn't mind meeting Sian myself

jonnar01jonnar01about 14 years ago
Great Story!

Very well done, and certainly hot. Looking forward to more!

zouzounizouzouniabout 14 years ago
It is ....

a sad day when we have to announce the use of proper English :) Personal gripes aside - wonderful story. Hot enough to leave you wanting more :)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 14 years ago
*claps enthusiastically*

more please? purdy please? *gets down onto knees prettily*

mdalexandermdalexanderabout 14 years ago
Wow

You should definitely continue this. It's amazing.

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I write stories ranging from erotic romance to a few kinkier tales, whatever flows best when I lie down. My full-length Scarlet rugby-themed erotic romance novels are published by Cariad/Accent Press under my pen name, 'Toria Lyons'. If you are reading my submissions on Lit...

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