All Comments on 'Pornstar Ch. 10'

you had my comment already, Simon :) would be nice to read another stories about one of the characters in this novel, though i.e. college life or adulthood (oh do Mandy, please!) We readers are so greedy, eh! *grins*

This story was just chock-full of awesomeness. I urge anyone who just happened on this chapter to read the whole thing.

Yes, it would be nice to write more of this; it was fun writing it. But it's fundamentally candy-floss and I'm trying to write more substantial things, so I have no plans to continue this story.

If anyone else wants to, feel free; the character who - for me - most cries out to have more written about her is Bretta.

This story is great fun, of course, but I think what surprised me most about it was how well you write the voice of an American teenager -- not what I'd expect from a middle-aged Scot! Kyle's a lot more considerate and socially conscious than most boys his age would be -- I'm not sure that most 18-year-olds could do the "about this breast stuff" speech -- but the rhythms and pacing of the way Kyle talks sound very realistic. You're impressive even when writing fluff!

I have a few minor quibbles about word choices that you make that an American kid wouldn't make (why is this set in the US, anyway?), but since you've moved on from this story, I doubt you're interested in fixing them. If you are, let me know.

Great ending to a great story. I think it would be twice as good if you deleted every "like" from the whole thing, though.

That was awesome, well done, excellent and THANK YOU

simon, I enjoyed your pornstar series, but I have to say I was shocked when I realized about halfway thru that it was set in the U.S. The commitment to virginity sounded so American evangelical that I was surprised to see it in a British story... So, as far as I can tell, Americans don't say brilliant, nor fancy. They might say great, awesome, bitchin (old) but rarely brilliant. Normally fancy is likewise rare. Liked or wanted are more likely. Thanks for the writing.

OK, so this story grew out of a writing challenge by an American writer of erotica called (I think) Jason Shelbourne - I'm sorry, it's a long time ago and I can't find the original link. It was a two or three paragraph story outline, but a number of the themes in the outline wouldn't fit in a UK setting, so it had to be US.

All you've read of this story is entirely my work - all the characters are mine, 95% of the plot - but I did start with someone else's outline.

I'm so very glad I discovered this wonderfully written story. Your characters are rich, believable, and unique. Thejr interactions with each other were believable and felt real. The element of self discovery during the transition from teen to adult was illustrated brilliantly. Thank you very much for sharing this with us.