All Comments on 'Princess Love'

Is this fantasy with some kind of parallel universe (you mention current popular authors), or is it real-life in a fictional place? It's decently written but could use some clarification.

not such a bad story, but the syntax is all over the place.....

i liked what i read maybe i have a simple mind for simple pleasure but i really enjoyed it. maybe another chapter to see how families react to there love? or just more on growing love

You need to learn the proper grammar and rules for writing dialogue. As it is, it's almost unreadable.

Same things as the other guys said as it needs proofreading, a grammar checker and a little more details that explain when and where the story takes place. Also break your shit down into smaller paragraphs because the large paragraphs are harder to read