All Comments on 'Punishment in the Shoes'

it might help to learn english

simply ... the WORST story on Literotica EVER ...

i think it was a pretty good try for the first time.... i'm sure you will improve as time goes on and learnt to do things like spell check *wink* .. it might help to have an editor, just have some one look it over before you submit it... but the content of the story is perfect for fetish stories and i'm sure the flow of the work will come with time..... try not to be discouraged.. i think you will do better as the stroy continues :)

The way story proceeds is highly passonate. The secrete fetish of the boy revealed in such a mannor that it portraits how to narrate a soft sex story. Certainly it stand apart from other madding crowds.

"made my pennies hard" learn 2 english, d00d

...and my nickles, and dimes... oh yeah- and my dick, too.