All Comments on 'Raping Nikki'

Love it..........fuck em hard and hot

this sounds like what my lover and i do, when he comes over and wakes me from sleep, to be an "unknown intruder" . God this is HOT, I think he needs to come see me tonight.

This was an arousing story but if you fix your writing style, you'll get an amazing five star story. There is absolutely no reason to put 'Him' and 'Me' in front of the spoken comments. Have a little faith in your readers, I think we can manage to figure it out.

I agree with the last comment. Edit out that “him” “me” stuff and you’re on the right road. Give the reader some credit.

He should have cum inside the bitch and knock her up good.

I liked your story and plot. Description was good. A little help in editing and you'll be great! I have the same problem, when I write, I get 2-3 people to "proof" read for me. Keep up the writting. I like your story lines!

Loved the story, but what the hell happened to the ending, just plopped down on the bed and that was it....needs just a little more to the ending!!

Putting Him- and Me- in front of each statement is unneeded and seems strange, more like a script than a story. Over all the writing quality is quite good though.