All Comments on 'Rational Behavior'

by idleardor

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theognis almost 11 years ago

*****

Damn. That was excellent.

Five.

SweetMonz almost 11 years ago

wow!!!

That was really really good, Please continue!!

Anonymousalmost 11 years ago

Great stuff

You must continue writing, this is wonderful stuff.

emj417 almost 11 years ago

More, please.

IronDragon almost 11 years ago

Excellent first effort!

You've done a great job on this one so far. Keep it up.

5 Big Stars!

quietman200 almost 11 years ago

I hope there's more

Great imagery and descriptiveness. You may want to consult a thesaurus in the future. "Canstellation" should have beeb "consolation", and there was similar gaff somewhere on page one. You did manage to start using "leveraged" after using "levied" once. That aside, this was really good. I was drawn into it, both the story and the sex. Often the sex scene winds up being merely gratuitous, but you painted a beautiful picture of two people totally lost in their desire for each other. The technical issues I mentioned are minor and easily corrected. They were noticed but didn't distract from the story. Keep writing. I hope there's more to this story.

curiouskatty almost 11 years ago

Great Start!

Loved this! I'm looking forward to more of your work!

CoCoNiy101 almost 11 years ago

Omg

Absolutely insane how hot this was. Great job!

mssoft2hld almost 11 years ago

fanfuckintastic

This was the hottest,sexiest, and most vivid story I have read in a LONG times... Damn keep it up

Anonymousalmost 11 years ago

what ?????

you got all the way to the end and could not finish it ???

ttrfanatic almost 11 years ago

Excellent Work

I see your story definitely lived up to expectations and I'm so happy to see that you posted it. It is definitely very hot and very much in need of a second chapter. Keep up the great work!