All Comments on 'Relaxing at the Beach Ch. 02'

I also like to write and no comments are irritating. This was a decent work, not great but not bad. I'm not sure how or why you fit a rape dream in with the three guys from the food stand. You could have gone with something a little less shocking, like a foursome sex dream. The teasing was good and I enjoyed the girl trying to show off to a crowd, but there wasn't much of a payoff. You write well and you should keep at it. I'm going to check out your other works.