by DirtyDelia
POV Changes from hell.. badly done, takes paragraphs to figure out you've switched, and to which character. This is what 3rd person is all about. Really awful.
Wonderfully-told illicit tale with shifting, conflicting emotions. Keep this up and you'll soon be a Literotica great! Thank you.
Delia ......... you are dirty and I am loving it!! Nice HOTTTT story.
Can we have a follow up one now?
I really enjoyed this story. It was well written and you captured the whole guilty pleasure feeling very well. It could easily go to a sequel or two. As has been pointed out, you could have placed it in more than one category, but thankfully you didn't choose Loving Wives. Look forward to reading more submissions from you.
Very HOT! We teally enjoyed it. Want to read more in perhaps a follow up.
This young lady writes with feelings depicting scenarios of real life incidents and portraying human frailties and emotions that are unusual from an inexperienced teenager. This are the type and form of stories and formats that should be encourage.
with a delightful twist at the end. I think you've set the stage for a wonderful follow up..that could lead to many possibilities. Nicely done.
should've been in 'loving wives' category..thats where the cheating stories go..it was a decent effort..i would score better but cheating stories get under my skin
Hard to believe this is your first effort. Please keep writing! One minor point: The past tense of "grind" is "ground" (not "grinded").
Yes, this story needs a continued affair with the father-in-law. Great, I hope that you write many more.
This would be a great start to a series, and I for one would love to see it continue. :)
I liked it very much, but I do wish the ending had of been different, but after thinking about it I don't think I could of improved it. Anyway I myself think you did an excellent story. Thanks- Carroll