All Comments on 'Revenge Ch. 01'

Revenge is EXPENSIVE; generally bought in Blood.

This Could Get Interesting.

Looking Forward to More.

I loved it and hope you plan on writing a next chapter. My only suggestion is the taking of her virginity should have been described in a little more detail. A petite 19 year old virgin would have a struggle with 8 inches no matter how aroused she was at the time of penetration. I hope he also takes her ass.

What I really enjoyed about this story was the potential for it to turn several different ways. Granted the whole interaction was kind of hot for the most part! Wonderful writing!

As a third party providing a purely objective opinion, it could be a potential plot twist that both the leaders of the kingdoms Hiunda and Albanan are working together in a sinister plot of which Kira is subject through the mass manipulations of 3rd party projections/Mysuki/cube farming or a variety of different mystical and magical powers tied directly to the new character of - drummmm rolll —the Divine Counsel of planet Hur - very excited to see how this turns out! Sounds like both sides could use outside counsel or wait - yep, yep...I am supposed to BE QUIET!

xoxo, Sorcerer’s Apprentice errr--- Unicorn of Love

Please continue this!

good story but is it just me but is this the same chapter as the other one

Repeat of the first chapter, would love to read what you intended to post.