All Comments on 'Rick and Hazel Ch. 01'

Do you really expect us to believe that a women would pickup a runaway like Rick and fuck him without hesitation within minutes of meeting him? Of course not.

Where's the build up? Far too rushed, no character development, depressingly written sex and a truly unbelievable situation.

You need to learn how to build a story, to use correct sentence construction and grammar and get an editor to help you build your story.

...and sometimes you KNOW the author of a story is still a virgin.

This is one of those time.

Oh dear, very poor, obviously a virgin boy's wanking fantasy. Older female takes in homeless teenager, then fucks him, yeah, sorry zero points, please don't bother with part 2.

For the read.