by jester9217
A good opening with promising storyline. Waiting for further developments...
I'm trying to figure out how this story has caught me. Don't know but I look forward to more. Thanks!
Great start man. I love it. You're a damn good writer
So please keep going!
Thanks for writing it for us:)
Ed
This is a very nice story. Your set up for the future is wide open and you in such a short time have laid a very solid foundation. I cant to see what's next.
I stumbled across your story and wonder where you will take us. So far? I like it. A lot.
I'll join with a few other comments, It's a good start with lots of possibility. Even it being only a Prologue, one can already see the first glimpses of your skill set. Hopefully there are many more Chapters to come, can't wait till then.
Ive published this
www.smashwords.com/books/view/820918
This isn't a free story shared on Literotica. This is an ad/teaser for a published story. At the *very* least something like that should be bold and obvious at the beginning of the story. Teasers like this belong on your own website, imo. Not fooling readers here.