All Comments on 'Sally's First Time'

That was bad!

Pulling onto the drive Lorie looked across at Sally and smiled broadly, there was a glint in his eye which Sally had not seen before. Lorie was male or female? I am not sure

First, please either use unambiguous male/female names, or ID Lorie as Hubby early on (exception...if it is deliberately intended to mislead or be ambiguous.)

I am surprised that this is tolerated in ANY category of LIT...I thought the 'victim' had to 'come around' before the story end! Don't see that here!

Really weird idea.

Lorie is an unambiguously feminine form. Did you perhaps nean Lauren. You build tension well starting with sally's surprise at having underwear laid out for her. The couple they visit are not remarkable but then neither are Sally and Lorie. Overall not terrible as a sort of mild stroke story.

We're in luck. This twit only tried one story before realizing it wasn't his calling.