All Comments on 'Santa Barbara Ch. 01'

I absolutely loved it! You have so got to do a second chapter detailing what happened later!!

Love the story...want more...please

Glad you are writing again. Hope your other writings are as good as this. It was my first.

A few typos, but for Ch 02, I'll overlook them.

Really well written, but too romancey for my taste. Obviously a female author, because when a girl giving a blowjob says i want you to cum in my mouth, no man replies with "so you shall." Stopped reading at that point. Sorry.

I read it straight through and I think it's hot. It really is believable but, unfortunately, all too rare in real life. Looking forward to more chapters!

Probably an A effort for most writers, but not one of your best. I think the female perspective doesn't suit you as well. Still quite good though. :)

To hook up with a young woman of so many years of fantasy, she would of been more than a morning snack. It wood of been so easy to go balls deep on the way to a kiss. I had to wonder wht the other women at the lake thought of her. They had to notice her attire the unlined suit, no bra, tight nipples for his visual delights. His wife might of guess who he was fucking that morning.

Well Jessica has only begun her stay I'm guessing the couch will not be needed tonight.

I thought this was one of the hottest stories I have ever read. I wish seems like this were true for older men and young women; however, reading this fantasy was spectacular. I don't know why other comments are not as effusive with praise. I encourage you to continue this writing style. It is a five out of five stars. Bravo

So... where is Chapter 2,,,, I read this when it was published,,, just reread it,,,, I soooo what to read the rest

Great story... would love to see chapter two!

... this story was posted, but it is my greatest hope that Chapter 2 will soon join it on Lit.

PLEASE!

5 Stars, and an Instant Favorite!

I totally disagree with a previous comment that you cannot write from a female perspective. You captured exactly how a woman would feel if she had a secret crush on an older man. You are a very talented writer and I can’t wait to read more of your stories.

You bastard!

You do realize that you’ve committed the literary sin of stopping in the middle of a blowjob, right?

SHAME ON YOU!!!

He could see her Adam’s apple going up and down. Really. I can’t believe no on else picked up on that.

So what happened at the interview!!