by toldastory
More. . Would love to be Sara with all those studs. . Well written.... Needing some more reading . . .
There are many errors - typos, sloppiness, punctuation, etc. in this, but :
2nd paragraph: "a butt you could literally bounce a quarter off - shoulder length blonde hair "
3rd paragraph: " She's got shoulder-length blonde hair, - Her butt is so tight you could literally bounce a quarter off it," ??
Not necessary to say it twice in a row. I'm pretty sure everyone got it the first time.
" either me or her were on our way" Poor grammar. Should be "She or I."
As for Sara, she seems to either be an experienced prostitute or has a mental problem and all these guys are willing to take advantage of it.
This story is like Schubert's 8th symphony. The unfinished one. Please finish the story! I cannot imaginr what could happen next. A whole novella could transpire. Thank you.