All Comments on 'Satisfaction'

by wgafa

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Not A Good Start

Sorry, but to me there was nothing in this story to excite me at all. Very poor first story.

pusskatpusskatabout 15 years ago
show, don't just tell

I recommend you re-do this story, adding more detail, depth, and description. Ignore the first person's comment -- this has good bones, but you need to flesh it out. Good luck, and I hope to see this story again, with more sensual detail. Cheers, Kat

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