All Comments on 'Saying Yes'

Well Laurie, your story leaves me wondering if you are sure that your heroine really wanted to "do daddy"? Also, what is with that guy? Is he a sicko insisting that she degrade herself for his need. If, as in most fiction, a part of this is drawn from life experience, I grieve for you.

John C.

tell_redshoe

grieve not, my friend. this is pure fiction and fantasy. sickco? maybe, but i've read much worse. chill out, baby.

love, laurie

I have read other stories that are composed of nothing but dialogue, and was sorely disappointed. Stories of this type of extremely difficult to write, but you have done quite well here, writing just enough "detail" into the dialogue to help guide the reader's imagination and interpretation of the events. The content is a bit disturbing, but that can also be a good thing; I only wish there had been a bit more of a "backstory" to the conversation seven months earlier... perhaps a prequel is required?

There was a story there, but it needed to be fleshed out a little and made more reader friendly.

This story had about as much heat as a dead fish.

I give you a "B" for craft -- skillfully using nothing but dialog -- but only a "C-" for story.

"Daddy" seems a little too predatory to love her as much as he says he does. Laying all his fantasies on her at once, so early in their new relationship is too much.

this story was as hot as dark side of the moon. the sex was boreing you never gave a describsion of the daughter. it took you almost the entire first page just to get, to get to any thing close to sex.

I agree with WFeather. Difficult format to write but a commendable effort. The degradation part spoiled it at the end though...

It's something of a psychological thriller. I like your story, but I'd like you to eventually continue by describing their passionate feelings.

For the fact that it is not easy to write in total dialogue, I give you the author some serious credit...although like other reviewers I did feel like the father was far too pushy and needed to have more tenderness in dealing with a hesitant daughter...plus the whole telling her that she would have to let him use her in every degrading way that he saw fit was just too unbelievable, especially since she's suppose to be this "really smart girl."

can't waint for the next one

The old sicko didn't love her - he loved himself.

I'm sorry I read it.

Stan