All Comments on 'Second Blossom Ch. 03'

No sex equals one star . This chapter needed to be longer and have erotic content

It was time on part 2 but part 3 solidifies it, just stop adding to the story. Start something new.

...because I'm a sucker for Chelsea. The story's close is subtly erotic as she texted Jake her wet flood. He's in for a great weekend. The dramatic irony of the story is Vanessa is getting her sex elsewhere. Drop the bitch, Jake.

There didn't need to be more sex, as anonymous idiot #1 suggested, to make it a good chapter, However, there did need to be more substance to move the plot further along. Also, your foreshadowing needs to be less obvious. Vanessa is willing to wait for Jake because she hooked up while he was away and found someone better at sex to keep her satisfied. I would have appreciated this more if there were significantly more plot advancement. As it is, I feel let down.

So far im enjoying it, and looking forward to further chapters. Vanessa is worth his time though

Isn't worth his time. Damn phone

Thanks for sharing.