All Comments on 'Second Chance Ch. 02'

I want more!!!

I loved Jason and Laysea's story. It was so sad that Trista was killed and my heart hurt for Jared but I am glad that you are writing a story for him and giving him not only a woman that will make him happy but he will also get a daughter out of the deal!!! I look forward to the next chapter. Thank!!!!

This is a cute story, and I really like Chloe. I suggest you work on the dialogue a bit. It's kind of clunky. Try more contractions, like "I'm" and "you're." People just don't talk as formally as you have them here (usually). But you nailed the little kid attitude!

I loved The Chess Piece and I think I'm going to love Second Chance even more. I absolutely love Chloe, she is so hilarious. I can't wait for more chapters.

awww i'm loving this story and chole she's funny and a doll.

*giggles*

Chloe: Jared?

Jared: Yes?

Chloe: Will you give mommy a baby?

Oh, I LOVE kids! =D

soooo funny. n chloe is something else. so cute. can you give mommy a baby, well see. no way. i bet that tom guy is someone from her past. it could be or hes just creepy.

I love them you should write more novel/stories your characters are great and have so much depth

Too many good writers don't have the courage to pen something that doesn't rely on oversized genitals for success. Very disappointing. Doesn't make it a bad story, but, could be better. With that said, if all the average cock length of all the male protagonists on Literotica would likely be about 9". Quite hilarious.