All Comments on 'Servicing a Client'

You show a wry, tight style- nothing fancy but very effectice. A nice first effort.

That was great, please write more

I loved the salesman part jcallah1 and the wife is superb i hope to read more chapters about the woman and the insurance salesman .

Pat Murray

Atlanta,Ga

All that servicing and no pay? And you could have fucked her and knocked her up, which could have led you to come back several times to see your baby and even add to the insurance policy, thereby getting paid....

I like the premise, but I feel like you squander some of its potential with too many extra letters (it just looks SLOPPPPPPPPPYYYYYYY), unwarranted caps (see previous parenthetical), extraneous details (your description of the woman needs to be reworded to sound less like a police bulletin), and an overly-long set-up. Being a fan of stories featuring adultery, anal, and filthy talk, I feel like this tale is a rewrite or two away from being a very hot, very funny little sexcapade. Ultimately, this kind of story needs to put the reader in the narrator's place, and the problems I mention here hinder that kind of vicarious experience. Hope you'll keep writing in this vein!

great story. Hope he services more at-home babes. How about am ebony hottie or a wife & teen daughter duo fuck? Thanxxx.

No human behavior was portrayed in this garbage.

Really sick -- so why did I like it? 5* from me, who must also be sick.