by orie
Brilliant writing - thanks.
Yes, in Scotland scotch is whisky - whiskey is Irish. And a bit more research on XKE brakes might be useful.
Just kidding. Can't wait for Mim to slip her hand under Mac's kilt.
I think after this first session, the school should be up for some new rules, Like total sex education of the male body and letting the girls see everything a cock can do including erections and orgasms and each girl should be allowed to touch their cocks and balls. This will complete their sex education while all the girls should be told at no time will any of the males be able to see any female in any state of undress. Then you can teach all the girls about CFNM and suggest that when in mixed company, only the males should be totally naked.
Apart from all Scotch being Whisky and not Whiskey, Leeks are not root vegetables. However, I do agree that Laphroaig is a prize winner. Thanks for a good read; Funny , Interesting and erotic enough!
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Wow, that was interesting. Firstly the good points: You write really well, the English is good as is the construction & grammar. Certainly entertaining in parts yet totally cringeworthy at the same time.
I wasn't really sure how to take the story. On one hand it's an amusing tale on the other hand, it's total nonsense. It made me laugh out loud because it was funny and also laugh at its sheer daftness.
However, I think that the fun side just about won out !
Let's wait & see in the next episode. PS. I still can't believe that any man would be daft enough to stand up on stage & be the object of ridicule for over 100 schoolgirls. Oh, it also just shows that all women are really interested in is "size, size & yet more size".
I've already told you how well I think you write. This story does not disappoint.
This is such a great story with a fascinating beginning, with great characters and nice slow build up.
A great writing Job !
Thanks
i like the story line and i like the humor in the story also. it makes the story come to life and more believable. keep up the good work. p. s. i think mim got hurt bad in a past relationship and she is scared.
FYI. It is legal for first cousins to marry in over half the US States.
Excellent story. I wish I could have rated it higher than 5. Just one note about the UK. Both Charles Darwin and his father married their first cousins. There is no real gentic danger as 1st cousins only share about 1/8 of the same genes.
Very well written story that keeps you hooked till you find out what's gonna happen next.
One very obvious error tho is having characters with a Scottish background yet referring to Scotch as whiskey, which is very definitely the Irish spelling.
Scotch whisky is the 'water of life' that is produced in Scotland.
I look forward to the next installment to find out how things develop.
This story would rate TOP Notch anywhere for both creative but believable plot line and for excellent writing. It is just so very well done with really nice character descriptions and development.
Finally, Thank God, nobody had 15 earth shaking orgasms during the first paragraph !
Thanks Orie !
Very well-written! This is what erotica is all about. And while not much has actually happened yet, it is extremely stimultating. Please keep up the great work. Looking forward to the next part!
This is yet another amazing adventure.
read this!!
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I much appreciated the way you build this story, nice to have some structure. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
I wish we had had something like this, instead of diagrams of rabbits and 'You have to be careful, girls.'
Anything else was little more than a bit of fumbling around the back of the bicycle sheds - and a tit-flash for five shillings a peek!
Great story - do bring us more.